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Post by randomail44 on May 10, 2010 15:31:04 GMT -5
I wrote a book about 2 months ago, who wants to read it? Heres the link bigfootstory.wordpress.com/Warnings:Gruesome Horror Some Profanity Serial Killings Totally changes the idea of bigfoot Please read this book, and comment telling me your opinion
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Post by moonplugg on Jun 11, 2010 22:19:40 GMT -5
Not a completely terrible story. But I do wonder. In chapter 2, where was bigfoot sleeping for 80 years that no one noticed him and either cremated or buried him?
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Post by Helmet on Jun 16, 2010 3:10:56 GMT -5
This is dark, REALLY dark.
The detail really needs work. In the first few chapters it is more of a script than anything, "Bigfoot did X, then killed Y, then beat Z with Y's dead body." If anything you should add a little more detail, give it a setting, a mood.
It can end up a pretty good story, you just need to clean it out.
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Post by redkneehighsocks on Jun 19, 2010 5:19:13 GMT -5
this seems to me not to be a book (like a novel) but a movie script. good story, but it needs to be elaborated, extended and given a level of suspence as helmet said, thins table needs some furniture polish. and some more emotion would be good
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Post by randomail44 on Jun 19, 2010 17:42:12 GMT -5
He was in a field, no one ever found him
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